
Aaron,
Thanks for presenting the comparison. Amazing to see what effect design can have.
The header is huge. However, who's the target audience? If it is you, then the discussion is over.
Your six primary nav links at the top could be repeated as headings in the body. If a visitor clicks on SEM (because he has now idea what SEM stands for) there is no repeat of the SEM text or a definition on the page. There are no visual queues that confirm he is in the right place. I think that those six links should have special treatment in the body text.
Your use of graphics is enticing at the beginning, but it seems to drop off between All the Web and Google. It might add some interest and break up the stream of text to add a few more graphics or images.
Use of bullets, indents and spacing is good. However, I would like the headings to be much bigger. I suppose this might not appeal to you because it will comparatively diminish the size of your logo/header. Making this long page into digestible pieces is a worthy goal. Headings on the original site look better to me.
Not sure I understand why the headings turn from blue to black down around Inktomi.
You could add some useful information in the left gutter, below the left nav to add interest or information. Could just be headings.










